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Post by RayanStiger on Jul 10, 2005 22:29:42 GMT -5
Hey gang! Well Alan and I randomly decided to write another fanfic together after playing much MMBN recently. Hopefully we'll actually finish this one...
Unlike past works, however, we will each be doing our own version of the story, like the games (Blue and White for BN 3, Blue Moon and Red Sun for 4, ProtoMan & Colonel for 5, you get the idea... like Pokemon. Marketing.). These two different stories will be similar along some things (basic plot), with differences in character appearances, battles, etc. They will both intertwine at various places, however. Anyways, enjoy the creation of our MMBN obsession!
-DP
P.S. Leave comments! I wanna hear from you people what you like, dislike, and any suggestions you may have on what I should do or should redo in my story. Thankee! Enjoy!
*mod* Forgot... disclaimer. MMBN belongs to Capcom. Some other things mentioned in here (i.e. Guilty Gear) belong to their respective companies. Most human characters are based off real people, so I don't think I can claim those as my own either... All navis are custom made, belonging to moi, as well as anybody who helped make their character's navi.
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Post by RayanStiger on Jul 10, 2005 22:43:57 GMT -5
Mega Man Battle Network Fan fiction / Shira Version
[Intro]
It was the year 20xx. Civilization flourished in a global internet-run society. People everywhere began to use portable devices known as PETs, or PErsonal Terminals, an evolved form of the cell phone. PETs were capable of sending and receiving e-mails, buying and selling merchandise, making phone calls and many other tasks. Each PET came installed with a Network Operator, or Navi: an artificial intelligence computer program that fulfilled the various tasks given them by their human operators.
The invention of the PET had created a new era: The Net Society. However, despite all its achievements, the PET failed to overcome mankind’s greatest adversary: Math class.
[Chapter 1 – Last Period]
DP shifted in his seat for the three hundredth time as he gazed expectantly at the overhead clock. He ruffled his hand through his dirty brown hair, and with his other hand he gently rapped on his desk as he waited for the dullest class in existence to end. DP wore brown pants and a red shirt with the Nintendo logo christened upon it. His head rested sideways upon his folded arms as he sat hunched forward in his seat, with a bored, vacant look on his face- the same one he wore to almost every class.
C’mon, c’mon… end already! DP commanded the clock. The clock’s minute hand rested teasingly in front of the twelve, tormenting him to no end. DP wondered if class would ever finish. His teacher, Mr. Namato, was infamous for frequently running class overtime; DP groaned at the thought of having to suffer through five more minutes of math. He wondered if class would continue indefinitely for all eternity, and he regretted neglecting to bring his cyanide pills.
At last, the bell rang, and Mr. Namato declared the class dismissed. With exuberant joy, DP victoriously leapt out of his seat with his hands raised and let out a whoop. “WOOO HOOO!!! Freedom at last!” Without hesitating for a moment, DP quickly gathered together his belongings and took off out the door.
“My gosh, I thought that class was NEVER gonna end,” DP groaned to himself. Thankful to finally be free, he casually leaned up against the wall to wait for his friends. A few moments later, DP heard a familiar voice call out to him.
“DPPPPPPPPPP!!!”
He looked over and saw his friend Alan running towards him. Following behind him a few feet was another one of his friends, Steph. “Yo, buddy! How ya been?” The two slapped their hands together in a high five and exchanged a quick hug. In a fake gangster voice, DP gave Alan his typical greeting phrase with an enormous grin pasted to his mug. “Whatup, mai azn brotha?”
“Nothin’ much. How was last period?” Alan asked in his deep and slightly goofy-toned voice.
“Intensely boring,” DP replied, rolling his eyes. “I fell asleep through the first half. After I woke up I suffered through the rest of the lecture.” Alan nodded. “Yeah, I fell asleep too. Navi Customization elective ain’t exactly the most interestin’ class ever,” he chuckled. A sudden blow to the back of Alan’s head caused him to cringe.
“Ow! Dammit Rene, what’d you do that for?” he moaned, turning to face her while rubbing his skull. Stephanie glared at him with her hands on her hips. “Because you deserved it!” she shouted. “You slept through class again, AND you left me behind! Baka!” DP enjoyed this spectacle immensely, so much so that he smirked. He always found it highly amusing when Alan got beat up by girls, which happened often. It was especially humorous when Steph was the one hitting him. They made quite an interesting pair, all differences considered. Alan was a tall, lanky Asian, slightly bulky and loose with messy dark hair; Stephanie was a white skinned girl of about the same height and ramrod slim, with blonde hair down to her neck. While Alan looked slightly slipshod in his wrinkled unbuttoned polo shirt and baggy pants, Stephanie was much more tidy and sharp looking with her blue jean shorts and clean, white tank top. They were great friends, although Steph tended to get mad at Alan a lot; he tended to earn it by nature.
Still sulking, Alan muttered, “Jeez, stupid ditzy white girl… always having to hit me for no reason…” Steph raised her hand threateningly to smack him upside the head again, making Alan duck and DP snicker. There were many things in life DP used as prime sources of entertainment; watching girls beat up Alan was one of them.
“I hit you because I always have a very good reason to!” Stephanie said. Alan snorted. “Why don’t you beat up on DP? He sleeps in class more than I do…” Steph’s glare still cut through Alan with razor effectiveness. “Because DP doesn’t act stupid like you do!”
“Ha, ha! That’s grade ‘A’ entertainment right there,” DP commented, smiling. He folded his hands and propped them against the back of his head. “Heya, Steph,” DP greeted her, and then added, “So, either of you seen Aileen?”
“Who knows?” Alan said with an indifferent shrug, dropping his current conflict with Steph. “She’s probably slaving away on homework or taking a nap.” Just then, Steph exclaimed with much excitement, “Here she comes now!”
A tall, attractive Asian girl walked briskly towards the threesome, carrying several books in her arms. She had long black hair and wore a stunning outfit. As she approached, DP raised his eyebrow mischievously. He made a beeline towards her and struck a cunning grin as he propped his arm on her shoulder. “Hey, good lookin’,” DP said furtively in a suave fashion. “Hey, darlin’,” Aileen replied, a warm smile gracing her face. She was always this pleasant and friendly, at least in school.
“I got lonesome in math class without you,” DP said in his smooth fashion. Aileen giggled slightly. “I missed you too.”
“So… when are you gonna plan that little… ya know, ‘emotional bonding time’ you promised me we’d do?” he asked, leaning in more on Aileen’s shoulder. Aileen made no visible reaction to DP’s flirtatiousness, but merely continued smiling.
“Fairly soon,” she replied. Aileen gave Steph a friendly short wave, which Steph returned to her. At that moment, Alan piped up.
“Psh, DP, you know she’ll never actually plan it.”
“SILENCE, INGRATE!” DP shouted back at him. While DP generally had no problem abusing his friends, he flaunted this practice on Alan. A teacher had once told him that this was extreme arrogance while shaking his head at DP in disapproval for several minutes.
“You know you’ll always be the cutesy nerd guy that the girls say is very nice, but never makes it for the score,” Alan quipped. Right on cue, Steph gave him a swift boot to the shin. “GAH! What the heck is wrong with you, girl!?” he yelled, holding his leg and jumping up and down. Steph gave Alan a fiery look boiling with fury before turning back towards Aileen.
“So Aileen, how ya doin’?” She instantly switched from irate to bubbly sweet. Alan muttered something about mood swings under his breath, at which Steph shot him another intimidating glare.
“I’m fine, although I have a lot of homework in advanced network programming class,” Aileen said. “Kyalan’s lucky to not have half the amount I have...” She sighed and dropped her backpack to the floor in order to relieve herself from its weight. DP wondered if it was a sigh of contentment or one signifying stress. Women tended to be very emotionally complex and confusing creatures. It was part of the reason why they intrigued him so much.
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Post by RayanStiger on Jul 10, 2005 22:45:42 GMT -5
“Speaking of Kyalan, I heard he got a navi recently,” Alan interrupted when he stopped limping in pain. Steph squealed with delight and clapped her hands. “Yay! Now he can finally hang out online with us!”
“Ky’s got a navi, eh? We should meet up online after we do our homework tonight and see if we can find this new navi of his,” DP suggested.
“I don’t know if I’ll be able to go online tonight. So many papers to write…” Aileen breathed. “What? Aw, c’mon, that’s what you say every day! You’ll find time!” DP protested.
“Don’t worry, DP,” Steph chimed. “She’ll probably be there to meet Ky’s navi. Oh, I hope his navi looks like Ky from Guilty Gear…” She swooned at the thought, clasping her hands together hopefully.
“Heh, you and your obsession with Ky…” Alan muttered. His hands tensed, and he leaned back in a dramatic pose. “Stupid pretty boy… I will beat him someday… I came so close last time. So close… SO CLOSE!”
“…If by close you mean he didn’t beat you within thirty seconds,” DP commented inconspicuously. He brushed his foot across the ground with false innocence.
“BAH! He just got lucky, that’s all!” Alan declared. His extreme self-confidence blinded him; it was likely the reason Alan always tried and failed to beat his eternal rival. “But if I meet his new navi, we won’t have to fight on Guilty Gear anymore! I can just have Mint beat up his navi!” He thrust back his head and chuckled a deliciously evil Mewtwo-inspired laugh. Steph’s nose wrinkled as she shot Alan a what-the-heck-is-wrong-with-you look.
“With your customization skills? Don’t count on it. Your navi is a breeding ground for computer bugs, and all she does is run around sporadically casting meteors in random directions,” DP said, tactfully ruining Alan’s moment of satisfaction with a dose of reality blended with a flavoring of satire. Alan blew DP off with another puff of air and continued ranting about his foolproof plan to destroy Ky, to which no one paid much attention.
“Look, enough ranting. You can net battle Ky and his navi, but we have to find them on the net, first,” DP said. “We should meet up at the usual romping grounds in two hours. Hopefully, that’ll give us enough time to get most of our work done. Except for Aileen, in which case she’ll just have to learn how to procrastinate.” He grinned at her and gave her a wink.
Aileen smiled back. She then reached down, grabbed her bag, and said, “Well, I gotta get going. See you guys later.” Without another word, Aileen walked off, leaving DP’s arm hanging in mid-air. He stared blankly for several seconds.
“Hey! Don’t go yet! I was just getting comfy!” Aileen didn’t hear him, but instead kept on going until she was out of sight. A half-fake disappointed look cloaked DP’s face. “Awwww…”
“Well, I better get going too. Bye!” Steph said, waving at DP. He waved back, and watched as she followed Aileen’s footsteps. When she was gone, DP turned to Alan.
“I’m gonna stick around here for awhile. Hang out with some punks and such. I’ll catch you later,” Alan told him. DP nodded. “All right…see ya bud. Good luck against Ky. You need it.” With that, they parted ways as DP left his friend behind and walked home.
{Author's comments: Well, this is as much as I've written thus far. What you see here is the product of my restless nights on my vacation down in NC. I spent much time on the small amount above (four pages), and I hope I did a good job on it. I tried in particular to get everybody as much in character as possible. Obviously, there will be flaws, as this is pretty much a first draft version. A second version can come out after I finish the whole fanfic (wish me luck on that one). Besides, it's more important to merely finish what I start than to do part of it "perfectly."
I haven't gotten to the actual netbattling/internet part yet. That comes up next. Also, there will be much more action in the next section than this one. I don't know if you noticed, but this isn't exactly my normal writing style, what you see here. It start with a long conversation and explanation instead of abrupt action or something to intrigue the reader to keep reading. I think this was a neccesary approach, for the most part, given how immense the Battle Network universe is. Plus, I was sorta trying to mimic the game/show's style of showing human interaction and then navi interaction. Besides, I figured it was worth trying something new.
Anyways, you'll probably see more of my typical super-descriptive/emotional/deep writing style when the story focuses more on the navis and their perspectives, given that I won't be trying to fabricate real-life look-alike situations as I somewhat tried to do with DP and all the human characters.
Well enough on my thoughts... can't give you too much to read or you'll get bored. Write me comments, people!}
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Post by KuraiGekkou on Jul 10, 2005 23:08:05 GMT -5
Aweee im sure i don't get hurt by Rene THAT much. hehe. XD. very nicely done though DP. Very well sum up of how we actually are in real-life. Poking fun here and there with people eh? hahaa. Good stuff.
Ill try to add some different characters in Mints version ^^. like we promised.
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Aldora
Infantry
LadyDarkness
Where there is Light, there is Darkness. Darkness and Light are the two halves of one.
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Post by Aldora on Jul 11, 2005 21:39:50 GMT -5
hehe whee! This is great! Not too OOC, but slightly. I really think if you posted this on fanfiction.net or fictionpress.com you'd get lots of reviews.
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Post by JKrew on Jul 11, 2005 21:54:26 GMT -5
It's pretty sweet I guess.
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Dysis
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Moo? Woo...
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Post by Dysis on Jul 13, 2005 8:04:42 GMT -5
...dp u must posty at threads...
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Post by bladeofky on Jul 15, 2005 14:28:42 GMT -5
So proffesional
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Post by RayanStiger on Jul 16, 2005 23:45:40 GMT -5
Thank you for your comments everyone. I have put up an edited chapter 1, which I now plan to submit to fanfiction.net and maybe fictionpress too if I feel like it. I've done much work on chapter 2, which some of you have told me you're highly anticipating. Thanks, I really appreciate people looking forward to reading my stories!
Just in case you're wondering how much more I have to do for chapter 2... I don't know how many pages it'll be, but I'm just at the part where Shira meets Mint on the Net. That should give you some sort of idea as to how much I've done.
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Aldora
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LadyDarkness
Where there is Light, there is Darkness. Darkness and Light are the two halves of one.
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Post by Aldora on Jul 17, 2005 0:23:07 GMT -5
I'm looking forward to it!
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Rene
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~*~Remember~*~
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Post by Rene on Jul 18, 2005 13:50:32 GMT -5
How much did you re-edit ch 1 XP I'm too lazy to re-read it if its only minor things. Oh and I already gave you my comments.
HURRY UP AND FINISH!
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Post by RayanStiger on Jul 19, 2005 21:30:25 GMT -5
Okay... update. Sorry I haven't finished ch 2. I would have, but got together with Zack yesterday and Matt today. Had great times with them too. I still worked on it both days, but obviously didn't finish it like I would have otherwise. Still, I'm making progress! Expect me to finish by either tomorrow or early the next day. No promises, but I'd be surprised if it took me any longer. Thankee for your patience!
*edit* Sigh... sorry, still working on it. This chapter is much longer and more complex than the first one, which is why it's taking me longer. Plus I haven't been sleeping well lately, except for during driver's ed. >u< Making much progress, just that it's taking me a long time.
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Post by Harle on Jul 20, 2005 13:55:25 GMT -5
Hhmm... I liked it. Very nice diction. XD Heh, I think maybe one thing had looked a bit off for me, but that was it. But now I want to post a few short stories if possible. ^_^ So, thank you for inspiring me thus far. Now I shall post.
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Post by Gai on Jul 23, 2005 22:20:58 GMT -5
*sniff sniff* Why ish David no in story? David love Mega Man.....Shadowman will smite thee if you refuse to put David in.
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Post by RayanStiger on Jul 23, 2005 22:29:23 GMT -5
Hush child... David will be in it later! Be patient! GAH! FINALLY driver's ed is over! Gosh it slowed me down so much... every time I say I'm gonna be done "the next day" it never happens. I think I'll stop promising release dates from now on. Ok... time to write more right now...
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