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Post by KuraiGekkou on Mar 27, 2004 15:23:19 GMT -5
Im researving this spot for now just give you heads up on mai next latest story! and mai first Fyia Fanfic! its going to be about Rayan, Kurai (duh), and Yvonne. Those will be the main 3 of course but there will be appearances of Mattus, Tira, Rene, and a few others. Those who arent familiar with mai works on Ria. well get ready for Kurai! the storywriter!!! ::extra cool pose::
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Post by RayanStiger on Mar 27, 2004 18:49:44 GMT -5
Oh yes yes yes YES!!! Alan is such a good fan fic writer... I can't believe it! Rayan is actually gonna be one of the main characters! Before, he was kinda...well, he wasn't mentioned much.
Oh, and don't forget Karunii! Tira won't go anywhere without him.
Anyway, Rayan, Kurai, and Yvonne! yay! I can't wait...
Go Alan! Rock on, my asian buddy!
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Post by Taylor on Mar 28, 2004 16:37:17 GMT -5
YAY!!
Finish the stoey where u were hiding those things in the temple and then a big beam of light came down on u.
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Post by KuraiGekkou on Apr 17, 2004 12:59:03 GMT -5
umm im going to need some background on Karunii Rayan ^^;;
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Post by RayanStiger on Apr 17, 2004 13:25:41 GMT -5
heh...sure... Well he is officially Tira's only friend. He is innocent and pure to a fault, and his kindness towards Tira is what made him her friend. He is very weak physically (can't fight basically), but is very strong spiritually. It is unknown where he came from or how old he is, but he looks to be about 17. He has the heart of a child, again, pure and innocent. He swore never to kill any living thing. He cares deeply for Tira, and would do anything for her, even though she sometimes hurts him emotionally (they are basically opposites). Go to Dark Sparka if you want to learn more...here is the link to the most important Tira and Karunii thread if you want to see. invisionfree.com/forums/The_Dark_Sparka/index.php?showtopic=111&st=0That help? Anything else you need to know?
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Post by KuraiGekkou on Apr 17, 2004 20:19:20 GMT -5
yeah. Wanna help me write chapter 2 after i post up chapter 1? ^^:; we could make it one of those help each other stories
you know like Chapter 1- By Kurai Chapter 2- By DP. Chapter 3- By Kurai Chapter 4- By DP.
and so on! ^^
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Post by KuraiGekkou on Apr 17, 2004 23:58:56 GMT -5
Chapter 1: Holy Knights
Whoooshhh... (cause i dunt have any supa spiffy intro to the story)
Setting: 3 years later in Fyia. 9:40 PM Fri. Weather: Heavy rain and thunder.
Somewhere in a temple in Fyia. vegetation everywhere engulfed its rocky structure and hid it as if it was a plant itself. (omg that sucked) inside a beatiful piano Melody filled the Temples room. Aldora was sitting in the piano seat. Aldora was a young gurl in her preteens quite short with a suprisingly red eyes and purple hair. She usually wears a dark purple dress with red ribbons on it and has a star necklace hanging from her. Her Purple hair glistened and reflected off the Thunder. the rain continued to hail down onto the roof of the temple. The Thunder competed against the slow melody of the paino. Inside the temple Kids where running around in a candle lit room. a man with short blue hair in a uniform bowed to a Lady wearing very angelic white looking clothes.
"Thank you Kari so much for allowing us to stay here for today," Karunii said. Karunii was the member of the Holy Knights wearing a quite spiffy Blue uniform. he is a medic Who has vowed never to kill another living creature. he looks very femine as if he was a young gurl. his innocent blue eyes support that fact. If any person was to walk up to this man they would think of him as a sweet shy gurl in blue. "Its ok Karunii i simply couldn't let you two stay outside in the cold rain could i?" Kari said with a sweet smile. Kari was a reknown priestess on Ria before its natures Karma became unbalanced. she had beatiful light brown hair that seemed to glow a peaceful aura. she is always wearing this kind of White Robe around her. hidden around her belt was a sort of pole that was actually a seathe for a kodachi. Whenever she smiled it was a warm feeling. Which worked perfectly on Karunii and made him Blush. Kari looked at the Lady behind Karunii and then clapped her hands happily. "Tira your with Karunii? How nice! did you join the Holy Knights or something?" She said sweetly. Tira made a disguisted look. "Of course not. I would not work for somehting like that. Karunii only gave me this uniform for now cause it was raining and cold and he was worried i would get sick.." She then ripped off the uniform reaveling a pretty skimpy outfit. Her long red hair covering one eye moved about from the motion and her tight blue pants reflected off the lightning from the window. "but now i guess i wont be needing it." Tira said with a small mishchieviious grin. Karunii exclaimed a pretty femine eek as he saw the cloth be ripped off her. "Tira! those uniforms are pretty expensive! please..."
The 3 then entered the room where Aldora was playing the Paino and The kids where safe in the warm candlelit room. The 3 stood by the paino admiring Aldora's playing. Thunder clashed. Kari gave that warm smile to Aldora when she looked up. Karunii held his hands out in front of him in admiration. Tira just crossed her arms and watched. It was quite itimatiting when Aldora saw Tira. She just was taller then both and her eyes gave off a evil aura. So Aldora quickly looked back at her notes and sorta blushed. The Rain COntinued to pour. Aldora then finished with a cord. Appluase came from around the room. and Aldora blushed more as she said "thank you everyone" She then stood up and bowed to Karunii and Tira. Karunii Smiled and returned the bow. Tira just looked away. Aldora then straightened up and smiled at them. "Welcome Karunii and Tira." She said in a cheerful young voice just spiced with innocence. Tira then suddenly tensed up, and as if weather followed Tira a thunderbolt crashed through the window casting long shadows everywhere and shook out all the candles (just say it did alright? ^^;; ) . Tira pushed Aldora and Karunii to the side as she lashed out a metal whip she kept at her waist and threw it twoards a dark corner. Kari sensing the danger from Tira pulled out her kodachi from her seathe and Karunii pushed Aldora away from them. The whip made a frightning and fast sound. Kids ran twoards Karunii and Aldora in fright. the whip reached a tall shadow figure sitting on a couch in the corner. Right when the whip reached its target it made a shi-tak sound and the whip hit the wall on the side. Tira a bit shocked that the whip didnt hit the target and was instead Countered leaped twoards the Target retracting her whip back to herself. Kari then yelled out "Wait Tira!!" it was too late Tira in the air whipped out 3 flying projectiles of flame. the flames raced twoards the shadowed man revealing some light on his face. His hair was black and quite long and his face was long and slender. He differntly had a very tall structure. the flames hit him but then quickly evaporated at touch.
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Post by KuraiGekkou on Apr 18, 2004 0:00:30 GMT -5
"IM sorry Tira but flames cannot harm me." the voice spoke. Tira landed and gave a slight growl at the target. She was getting ready for another attack. but right before she could launch herself at the man Kari grabbed her shoulder. "don't Tira.. its ok.. hes not going to hurt us anymore." Tira slapped Kari's hand off. "Why would i care if he harmed any of you. I just want another match from him." And at that momment the man slapped his fingers and candles relighted. The figure was still on the couch. "Tira.. still as fiesty as before eh?" The man gave out a hearty laugh. He was a very handsome man with a tall structure and slender face. "Aoshi... why did you go to the light side? Your energy is complete evil you know?" Tira said slowly getting back from her fighting stance. Aoshi just smiled and left that question unanswered. instead he reached for his treasured small tea chest and opened it. "Tea anyone?" another thunder flash. -------------------------------
Kurai walked along the dark streets soaking wet as rain continued to pound against him. Kurai was somewhat like Aoshi except his hair was dyed blue with his natural black colour. his body was not too muscular. he had many things of cuts and battle scars along his arms. his clothes however where always flashy and tight. he was very attractive. But however his devilish dark eyes could scare any gurl before they could even talk to him. following him was his daughter Mint. However she was dead and is just a spirit now. She is forever at her childish age though. she floated along side as the rain fell straight through her. Her long Red hair continously evaporated and reformed along with her skirt. her eyes were a rather very frightning red eyes on her cute eyes. she right now had a very concerned look on her eyes.
"Daddy walking in the rain is not a good idea i suggest we return to the cave." Mint said floating in front of her father to get attention. Kurai gave out a soft growl. 'We are not in Fyia anymore remember!?!" Kurai then mumbled something under his breath. Mint a bit shocked from her father's response stopped in her tracks and then moved back to his side. Kurai then suddenly coughed and dizzly stepped about. Mint Shrieked and then turned her hands into a form that could support Kurai from falling. Unfourtnatly Kurai was too heavy and then fell straight down. Mint shrieked again and turned back spirited form as Kurai fell straight through her. Kurai was knocked out. Mint held her hands shocked near her mouth. she frantically looked about for help and then yelled out. "HELP!! anyone!?" suddenly a voice whispered into Mints ear. "Ill help your father dunt worry." mint Shrieked as her spine had a chill sent down. she turned around and there stood a man with a long black trench coat and a hat stood. the wind whisped his coat about and the rain pattered against his hat. something was abnormal on his face though. Mint weakly smiled and chuckled very slightly. "ehehhe your not at all scared im a ghost?" Mint meekly said. "how can you see me anyways. ONly those who know mai father well can see me..." The man didnt respond. "Your father is about to be helped out a lot." And suddenly his hand started to glow a mysterious black aura. he placed the hand on Kurai's Chest and the aura wisped about into his mouth and ear and fingers and other body parts. Mint yelped and started to pound against the mans back. "What are you doing! Stop that!" Mints punch was ineffective, and the man started to grin. "Mint do not worry from now on your father will be what he dreamed of. This power is granted by Darkness itself. They see something in Kurai. Something that earns the title of Shinigami." Mint stoped and sweatdrop. "What the hell you talking about. All mai father do is Steal hot dogs, get drunk, and get beat up bai gurls. how can that earn the title of god of Death?" The man didnt respond but instead sweatdropped.
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Post by KuraiGekkou on Apr 18, 2004 0:01:40 GMT -5
Karunii sipped hot tea against his lips. rain continued to pour. They were all sitting in the living room on couches. Karunii sat in a 2 seater with Tira and Yvonne Aldora and kari and aoshi sat in a 3 seater across from them. Kari tsked and then said in a quite pessimistic voice. "It seems that this rain will last for a while. But thats ok you two can spend the night here if you want., We have two sepreate bedrooms. Tira shuddered at that thought She really didnt want to stay in such a light aura place. espescailly with all these people. Aoshi stood up and yawned. "If you dunt mind Kari i must go to sleep now." He said with a constant smile and he carfully took his tea chest in his right hand and leaned over to kiss Kari on the cheek. he then started to walk into a sepreate room. Tira couldnt help but to have a very shocked look on her face. She then leaned back into her seat and was like. "Ohhh nooo.. please dunt tell me... oh mai gosh.. oh mai..." Tira then proceeded to shake her head. Kari smiled and chuckled. "Oh no.. hehe nothing like that. He is just friendly thats all. now tell me Karunii about these Holy Knights?" she said trying to change the subject. Karunii was busy eating some cookies but then looked up and smiled. "Yes Kari the Holy Knights is a new organization here to exterminate the presence of Devils here." He then pulled out a couple of papers from his shirt pocket and handed it to Kari. "recently you see we had many reports on attacks by devils. How do we know its devils? we know from our general Mattus. He seems to know the strange attacks from them." Karunii then leaned back and grabbed another cookie. (Cookies and Tea??) Kari's Cheerful expression went down to a quite serious one. "Devils?" Suddenly the door burst open and in came a couple of men. Kids around them screamed as the Thunderstorms wrath blew into the house. The men ran inside their room wearing armor helmalt and equiped with a bunch of guns. "Holy KNights here Everyone put your hands up!!" Everyone obeyed even the kids. A small kid cried. The door was then shut by one of the men and all the men positioned their guns on each person. No face was seen on the men they were all shrouded by the hemalt. Everyone seemed to be the same with their armor and such but familiar voice was heard from the back of the men.
"Wait a minute.. this can't be right..." The man walked up through the others up to were the 4 sat. the man dropped his gun and his hands shook. "K--k---Kari!?" the voice trembled happily. "Your here!? on Fyia?!" the man didnt have a helmat on but instead a head band. Kari looked at the man and then clapped her hands. "Rayan?!" Rayan happily hugged her. but Kari sorta sweatdropped and Tira was ready to kill everyone. so IN conclusion Tira punched Rayan onto the floor and Kari helped. The mens guns cocked and they all positioned on Kari and Tira. Kari yelped and emabarrisingly yelled "Sorry! thats just a gurls instinct!" Tira just took out her whip and growled at everyone. Suddenly Karunii stepped forward at them. "Please Explain why are you all here? Im a Holy Knight too and there are no reports of Devil activity here!" Karunii said in his gurly sounding voice. No one replied but instead one man whispered to another man. " they let gurls onto the holy knights now?" Karunii sweatdropped. Rayan then Straightened himself up. Karunii just then got a good look at his badge and saluted to him. "oH Commander Sir! i ask of you why are you and them here?" he then finished saluting. Rayan then showed him a tracking device used by the Holy KNights. "Don't worry mam'" Karunii sweadtopped again " everything is under control. We just have reports of a Devil in this area. So if you may?" Karunii confident of no devils here replied. "Continue on." Rayan signaled to his men and they put there guns upwards and then ran along with Rayan's Direction. They ran into the rooms hallway. Kari sighed and comforted the children along with Aldora. Tira just glared at them as they ran and Karunii flopped back into his chair. "Devils in your area i dream of not Kari. What do you think?" Kari just shrugged and then continued comforting the children. Suddenly gunfire was heard. Kari leaped up and children started to cry again. Karunii ran twoards the sound. "I must aid the Holy KNights if there really is a devil!" Tira was already busy running up the steps. Aldora held her hands together and got a worried expression. "Sister Kari. Isnt that coming from..." And Kari quickly ran after them.
Aoshi using his tea chest blocked all the gunfires skillfully. "Who are you men!? why are you here?" he said loudly. Rayan just yelled out. "DIE DEVIL! DIE!! YOU SHALL NOT TERROIZE THE HUMAN RACE WITHOUT BEING PUNISHED!!" Aoshi then opened his chest and took 3 fans. "im sorry god but forgive me..." And he then put his teachest in some pocket and opened 2 fans in each hands and carried one in his mouth. the fans blocked more gunshot as Aoshi advanced twoards the frontline. quickly he knocked each man out with the whap of his fan. Rayan was a bit frightedned. "Use the Oni-Cannon!" And 3 man picked up a large cannon and fired out a large green glow that filled up the room with its colour. the backfire was so strong all t3 men fell backwards along with the cannon. the defening blow frightened everyone to a point they stopped firing. Aoshi unpreapeared was hit by it. It forcefully threw his body into a wall along with burning his shirt off. His body shook and he weakly stood up. "What are you guys doing!?" he yelled out angrily. rayan shout out more orders. "Fire again!" The Cannon gave out a chargin humming noise and started to glow again ready to fire. But right before it fired it strangely fell twoards the side and tilted back at 3 men and Rayans Back Line. Rayan Shocked looked behind him and saw Tira standing outside with a smile. the Cannon fired and the 3 men holding it along with the backline flew off the stair case. Rayan however skifully dodged it and stood on the same stair case as Tira did. Unfourtnaly he fell off... -.-;; but to the side which was not going twoards the 1st floor. the front line and 2nd line stopped fireing and stared at Rayan. This gave Aoshi Enough time to run back downstairs. Rayan yelled at his men. "Dunt let him get away GO GO GO!!!" And the men started down the staircase. "Wait!" Tira said and blocked the way for the men. "Your not touching him. He is Mines." Karunii who just made it to the benging of the stair case yelled up at Tira. "Tira! please dunt hurt them im sure we can reason with them!" He said as he was helping those who got hit by the cannon. Tira rolled her eyes "You relaly want to spare these idiots who just barged into this house and started to accuse Aoshi of being a Devil?!" She said annoyed. Rayan Yelled again "Stop wasting our time! This devil indicator shows that Aoshi Is a devil and therefore must be killed!" Tira looked twoards Rayan and then anooyingly said. "You Stupid... Idiot... how can somone who just carries around a teachest be a devil (however dodging 3 lines of bullet fire is quite the work of a devil but... ) " then a voice from downstairs yelled out. "thats cause Aoshi IS a devil Tira. " It was Kari downstairs looking up at the group upstairs. She also Helped Karunii fix up the injured shoulders. "But he is living here with me and i wish you not to harm him." she said. Rayan Sputtered. "Lady Kari but. pahhh Bahhhh!! he could hurt you and!" Kari shaked her head. "No he wouldn't. He is a devil and he has already done bad things but i promise you he is now a good man seeking forgiveness from God. Rayan hesitated but sorta blushed. Tira sweatdropped. " from that view upstairs i dunt relaly want to know where Rayan is Looking at..." She said in a soft voice. But the men in front of her nodded their head agreeingly. rayan then rubbed the back of his head. "wellll... fine we will just say that he is under supervision by you Kari. But then we will have to make you a Holy Knight. And i suppose gurls can join now cause of this Medic over here." Rayan said nodding his head twoards Karunii. Karunii Blushed and then angrily yelled out. "IM NOT A GURL!!! AHH!!!" Rayan then sweatdropped. "Yeah whatever..." he said. Suddenly Aoshi ran back into the room with the kids and Aldora. Aoshi Held Karis shoulder with a very worried look on his face.
"Kari.. You won't belive whats outside...."
-end of Chapter 1-
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Post by Taylor on Apr 18, 2004 0:07:30 GMT -5
OOOOOOOO! PLEASE MORE!!!!!!!!!
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Aldora
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LadyDarkness
Where there is Light, there is Darkness. Darkness and Light are the two halves of one.
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Post by Aldora on Apr 18, 2004 13:03:16 GMT -5
Wow! You're great! Write more!!!
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Aldora
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LadyDarkness
Where there is Light, there is Darkness. Darkness and Light are the two halves of one.
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Post by Aldora on Apr 18, 2004 13:30:07 GMT -5
Rayan, you're coming out with the next chapter right? *smiles*
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Post by Taylor on Apr 18, 2004 23:50:13 GMT -5
Hurry! Hurry! Hurry! PLEASE!!! *BIG SMILE!*
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Post by RayanStiger on Apr 19, 2004 17:12:03 GMT -5
Man Alan this is sweet! Okay I really like the idea of me writing the next chapter! I can't today...test tomorrow. But Wednesday...nothing else to do but WRITE!!!
I like this very much-ness. But...I have a few problems...
I know it's hard to keep everybody in character, but you messed Rayan up a little bit (although the head rubbing thing and blushing is what he would do). But that doesn't compare to how you messed up Tira! She acts nothing like that! Only Rachel and I really know what she's like. I will show you when I write my portion.
Oh yeah Alan I need you to tell me if you have any particular set plot in mind. If not, I make my own as I go. I don't wanna mess up your story if you want it a certain way. But again, I'm so glad you considered letting me write some. Rock on mai azn buddy!
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Post by KuraiGekkou on Apr 19, 2004 18:43:41 GMT -5
I relized that and i really studdered when i was writing it. Well i dunt happen to know Tira that much so tahts why i ask to write so i can learn more from other people and stuff.
no set plot. but i am hopping for a lil relation conflict with Aoshi and Rayan for Kari. If read in mai next chapter of Kuro-Rene you will sorta get the idea. (which i was just working on a while ago.) so knock yourself out.
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