Mega Man Battle Network fanfiction - Mint Version

[KuraiGekkou]

So yup here we go Heres where ill be posting my lil version of the Fanfic me and Rayan decide to write on. This way if we have sepreate fanfics we will be able to not be troubled by who's turn is it and so on. Which hehe.. brings up a lot of promblems. Neways! Why we make different versions? Well.. for once i would like to see me as a main character (WHOA! ALAN A MAIN CHARACTER!? le gasp..)

and also it just seems kewl and true to the Rockman.exe tradition.

SO yeah.

Notes for myself and you too.


Alan Gets Mint

+: Meteor frantic and Remobit fanatic
-: Bugs galore, clueless in Navicust

Personality: Optimistic and Playul. Usually ends up destorying a lot of panels and webpages around her. Sometimes gets randomn bugs due to her faulty Navi Cust.



(Minus the evil look PLus a cute hat)
Appearance: Baby Blue theme dress. Large floppy headgear with a puffball at the tip. Carries a golden staff with a red gem at the tip. Looks like a lil gurl. pinkish red hair cut to her neck and dark red eyes.

Charged shot: Asteriod flies forward in a straight line. Fire damage.

Navi Special: Remobit Asteriod - 15 remobits fall from the sky cracking panels as they hit the ground.


DP gets Shira
+: Sword techniques and battle tactics (Navi cust)
-: little chip user and anti-social

Appearance: Samurai gurl get up. Red robe and all. Long hair goes down to waist. Uses Two katanas. brown eyes.


(Plus longer hair Minus the wierd ears)
Personality: solemn, quiet, serious, doesn't relate much to other navis. has mutual tolerance for some, but some she respects after seeing their potential in battle.

Charged shot: Cuts Long then Wide or vice a versa.

Navi Special: Initial Strike. A quick step sword attack that contains a fire attack. Opponent will be paralyzed after attack

Ky gets Valest

+: Stealth (Ability to skip one panel) and massive long range damage
-: low defense

Appearance: One his right arm he carries a large, long barreled sniper rifle which swivels around to be fired. On the left is an energy katar used for close quarters combat. He is dressed in black with midnight blue gauntlets/boots/helmet adorned in light and dark purple. He wears a large dark purple cloak, used for disguising his datastream from other navi to make him difficult to identify.

Personality: Although he has a rather warm personality, Valest rarely smiles and speaks minimally. During combat situations, he becomes astonishingly cold and unemotional, a personality suited for his primary combat function of sniping.
Charged Shot: A Sniper rifle shot. powerful XD. (normal shot is actually just a katar swipe takes one panel range)

Navi Special: Endless Inferium - Valests area will be covered with trees/rocks/bushes. Valest will be hiding in one of them. 3 unavoidable sniper shots will be shot unless the opponent can destroy the tree/rock/bush Valest is hiding in before he does so.

Aileen gets Hiero

+: Holy Panel slowly heals him. Lightning attacks and heal chips.
-: Low Hp and has weak attack.



(Minus the Black outfit)
Appearance: Long Blue haired guy navi wearing a strange helmat that covers up his eyes and has two Angel wings coming out from its sides they go back sideways and stick up at an angle. His clothings are long and white and has a massive white cloak about him. His eyes are a light blue.

Personality: Sauve and enjoys flirting with gurl navis. Very clam and collected. Enjoys talking and helping Aileen with anything possible. Avoids battles.

Charged Shot: Cleanse any abnormal Panel status on where he stands and attacks with a Spark. (Spark slowly traces twoards the enemy in a small lightning ball form)

Navi Special: Holy Guard - Summons 3 Guardians covering an entire column in front on which he stands.


Rene Gets Cherry

+: Elemental Powers Lava dosent damage her
-: Weak against Traps and elements that rule over her current state


Appearance: A very young and cute Navi with short blonde hair and big blue eyes. Always has a strange white blob following her everywhere she goes. The White blobs name is Pie. Pie helps Cherry changes panels to elemental states.

Personality: Very Naive and Tires out easily. Very skilled when using elemental powers though. Cherry Never talks unlike her operator Rene. Pie however talks in a very strange voice O-o;;

Charged Shot: Squezzes Pie to release a 2 panel shot that dusts along the ground changing the panels into a randomn state (Cracked, Ice, Lava, or grass) If there is no panel in front of Pie. The attack fails.

Navi Special: Pie Bomb - Pie is thrown 3 panels ahead and on contact with ground Pie will explode in a 3*3 panel radius doing one of the followings: Thunder Damage and cracking the panels. Fire Damage and turning panels to Lava. Grass Damage and turning the Panels to Grass. Water damage and turning the panels to Ice.

[KuraiGekkou]

Ch.1 The year was 20XX

"sahh..." sighed out a lanky azn boy as he slowly slid into his chair. "I hate NaviCust Classes.. soo long and boring.." he said in his usually deep voice tainted with a femine style.

The class was a typical high school room. Filled with the chalkboard, windows, and of course inspirational posters that are suppose to make the students motivated to work. Our hero, the lanky azn guy, is currently taking the course NaviCust in order to get a better understanding on how to modify his Navi. Navi's are network operators inside a futuristic Cell phone called P.E.T.s . Now we return to the Lanky Azn Guy, Alan.

"..." Alan casually looked out the window with half sleepy eyes as he slowly slid his hand twoards his face. His half unbuttoned shirt revealed a Blue stone around his neck tied with a black string. The stone was incased with a silver metal designed in the shape of a flame. He wore glasses tinted with a slightly pinkish colour.

"ahh its bliss.." Alan said smiling as he slowly dazed off into a daydream ignoring what the teacher was saying. This was shortly lived as suddenly a writing utensil was hurled at his face smacking his face.

"what the.." Alan softly said trying not to raise his voice in class. Slowly he turned his face twoards the direction the pencil came from and facefaulted.

"you.." Alan Whispered angrily twoards A brown haired gurl with blonde streaks in it. Her body was almost as lanky as his own. She wore tight and typical american gurl clothing. "Stop Sleeping in class baka..." She whispered back equally harshly.

"ahh.. stupid Rene.. let me be..." Alan said twirling his finger in the air in a like-i-care manner. He then resumed to dazing off in class by slidding his face down into the palm of his hand and let out a soft sigh.

"...Don't you sleep.. I am warning you.." Rene glared out that warning. Alan didn't take any worry about it and slowly shut his eyes. Quickly an enrage Rene proceeded to toss a blunt book at his face with a powerful swing, smashing into Alan's face. The Impact of the book threw Alan out of his seat leaving a small blood trail in the air.

The whole class and teacher turned twoards Alan who was now on the ground. Rene sweatdropped and slowly turned twoards the staring class.

"ahh.. Ahh.." She then quickly crossed her arms and let out a puff of angry air. "It was his fault anyways! He was sleeping in class..." And with that said the slowly recovering Alan rose his hand in the air.

"Teacher.. can i get my seat changed?"

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Class has ended and Alan was walking down the ordinary boringly painted hallway of his high school. His body was half hunched in a relax but pissed off mood. His hands was in his pocket as he held his messanger bag close to his body. "man i can't belive you actually did that.. your such an idiot Rene.." He muttered angrily at her. Rene was just beside him walking down the hall and kept a cool face on.

"Well maybe if you listened to me this could have been avoided.." Rene said in a strong firm tone. Rene was a gurl who usually got her way through firm physical action. This worked well with Alan.

"ugly..." Alan Muttered angrily, this was quickly responded with a swift kick to the shin. Alan quickly made a grunt and tried his best to hide the pain. Rene just smirked. "Baka.." She whispered.

"Whats up my Azn Brother!" Cried out a cheerful voice. This voice could only belong to Alan's good friend, DP. Dp was your ordinary Otaku gamer. Except he had highly sociable and friendly attitude unlike most otakus. He was a slim boy with glasses and noticible nerd features, such as his gaming shirts.

Seeing D.P. leaning back at his usually meeting place brought some joy and relief to his heart. "Ha! Hey man!" Alan smiled happily and gave him a quick high five. "hehe nothing much.. just.." Alan started

"Just that Rene is giving you the typical beating huh?" DP said finishing Alan's sentance. Alan quickly sighed and turned to Rene. "Unfourtantly yes... Ugly here.." and before Alan could finish that sentance he was quickly given a punch twoards the stomach.

DP happily grinned, he was obviously enjoying it. Alan rubbed his stomach and opened one eye angrily at Rene. "seriously..." he muttered but was cut off once again.

"Alan it's not nice to call gurls ugly or anything else.. will you never learn?" called out a calm voice. Alan looked at the gurl who just cut him off and there stood Aileen. Aileen was your typical azn chick. Except maybe shes on the higher end of attractiviness. She had long black hair and always wore a nice outfit. She wasn't skinny like those crazy obssesing image dieting gurls nor too chubby either. According to DP she was definition of beauty. To Alan However....

"Funny how we were just talking about Ugly and you show up..." Alan Joked with a shrug. Quickly the two ladies brought their foot down onto Alan's foot. Rene with an angry PO'ed expression, and Aileen with her typical warm smile still. Alan let out a suprised pain yelp and hoped about holding one foot. Dp on cue quickly rushed up to her and leaned an arm against the wall staring straight at Aileen with full attention.

"So hows it goes good lookin? Still working on those AP Programming classes?" Dp asked in a slightly more mature tone. " Changing your voice already.." Alan Smirked as he watched DP's pick ups.

Aileen slowly lifted up one of the books she was carrying up next to her face and tilted her head slowly she let out a groan. ".. yeah.. unfourtantly. Looks like i won't be able to come online tonight.." She said with a distant look.

DP Quickly let out a depressed sigh." I guess that means we won't be having some of our quality time together either huh?" he said sadly. Aileen continued to let out an optimistic smile. "Don't worry we will sooner or later." She said happily despite the obvious gloom cloud that just shrouded around DP.

"I have to go now! bai bai!" Aileen took a small happy hop as she turned around and ran off waving. DP slowly rose up a hand weakly and waved. "bai.. bai.." Obviously his own gloom cloud was starting to get to him. Parting with Aileen always seemed to be hard for him.

Alan just let out a small giggle. "ehh you worry too much about relationships DP. Your too young now man! Just give it a few years when Aileen needs somone to fall back into." He then gave a friendly pat on DP's back. DP let out a smile showing recovery.

"Ya. Neways you won't belive it but my Navi Mint once again had a bug while i was surfiing aroudn the web. Man she can be so unrealible sometimes.." Alan said dissapointed as he pulled out his Light Violet P.E.T. DP and Rene just let out a sweatdrop at Alan's comment.

"Whats so not belivible about that? Your freakin navi Custom is all wrong.. Of course she has bugs.." DP said harshly. "This is why you have to stay awake in NaviCust Classes Alan!" Rene said angrily.

"heyy.. its not my fault that the teacher is boring and not good looking!" Alan said angrily defending himself. He then shoved his P.E.T. Back into his pocket and puffed up his cheeks angrily. "making excuses again..." DP sighed and shrugged his shoulders. He then placed a hand in the palm of his hand.

[KuraiGekkou]

"Oh yeah! Speaking of Navis.. I heard that Kyalan actually has one!" DP smirked. "Rumor has it around school!". Kyalan was the Prince of this high school, he was good looking and very smart. If only he had a more outgoing attitude and more athletic one he would have his own fanclub of gurls in this school.

"KyAlan!?" Rene said suprised. She then clasped her hands together and smiled happily. "I can't wait to see it! what does it look like!? is it Male or female!? Is it a battle type navi!?" She quickly asked in one blow.

DP just sweatdropped and smiled. "I don't know.. its just a rumor he has one from one of the gurls that like him." He then crossed his arms. "But it wouldn't be that hard to track down his navi would it? Following Kyalan's xanga we could track down the datastream the navi leaves behind it."

Alan Just smiled he was overjoyed to hear that Kyalan had a navi. "Finally.. a chance to prove that im better then Kyalan.." he chuckled and was filled with excitment. Rene and Dp however gave out dissaproved faces. "You? Alan? hehe. with that Bugged up Navi!?" DP chuckled and then threw down a hand onto Alan's back. "Don't count on it! Im sure Kyalan wil have a tough navi to beat!"

Alan let out a grunt and brushed off DP's hand angrily. "so My navi has a few bugs i can still beat him.. hmph!". Rene slowly shook her head and sighed. "Alan.. you know bugs could change the very outcome of the battle. so don't be stupid." And just before Alan could let out a comment the school bell rung.

Rene let out a smile. "Well that means seniors can get home now! lata Dp!" She smiled and ran out the door. Alan smiled too and let out a wave for he was a senior too. "take it easy DP. Youll score a chick soon." Alan Smirked and threw a thumbs up at him. DP Sighed and let out a wave. He was so not looking forward to more classtime and knowing Alan and Rene will be relaxing at their own homes.

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Alan Slowly made his way to the bed in his room and quickly flopped onto the bed with no care. Quickly he tossed his messanger bag to the side of his stardust coloured room. He then pulled out from his pocket his P.E.T.

"Finally school is over. You can come out of hibernation Mint." Alan said cheerfully at his violet P.E.T. The screen on the P.E.T. Slowly flickered and then showed an image of a small gurl rubbing her eyes sleepily.

"ahh Alan. How are you doing today? how was school?" She said happily in a melodic tone of voice. Mint was Alan's navi. Even though she is just a network operator living in a vitrual world, she acts just like a human. She has on a very large dress baby blue theme and wore a large floppy hat with a fuzzball at the tip. She always carried a golden staff around her with a red gem at the tip. This navi Mint was made to look like she was in her very early pre-teens.

Alan Smiled as he heard Mints voice. It made coming home fun knowing he would be able to talk to Mint. "It was just fine Mint. Except that idiot Rene tossed a book at me for no reason.."

Mint let out a nervous chuckle. "that was because you slept in class wasn't it.. again..." Mint said with a smug smile. Alan Slowly hung his head depressed. "yeah.. but she didn't have to wake me up with a heavy object.."

Mint just smiled and then twirled her staff. "neh! So we should start on the homework now huh Alan?" She said optimistically. Alan let out a smirk and sat upstraight on his bed holding the P.E.T. "Are you kidding me!? We are getting on the Net first! Rumor has it Kyalan has a Navi!" Alan said excited.

"Ahh.. but.. Alan.. your homework.." Mint tried to say but knew Alan would just go straight to his laptop and Jack-in her to the net. "that can wait!" Alan Cried out and took out a long Cord out of the side of P.E.T. he then plugged the cord into the side port of his Laptop.

"Jack-in Mint.EXE!!!" Alan cried out happily. Mint let out a groan. "here we go..."

((Author Comments: ::cricket Chirp:: ))

[Aldora]

^_^ I like it so far. *laughs* Some parts I find amusing.

[RayanStiger]

You finally stopped slacking off and wrote your first chapter! ^-^ I like it! Recap evaluation...

Good job rping yourself, of course. I love the interaction between DP and Alan, and how you described me. Woo hoo nerd power! Also I picked up a few hints on how to rp Aileen much better, seeing as you've (unfortunately) had more contact with her. I love Alan's advice to DP.

"ehh you worry too much about relationships DP. Your too young now man! Just give it a few years when Aileen needs somone to fall back into." - Hilarious stuff. XD I think I might use that advice irl, too...

Anyways, your fanfiction seems to be on a less realistically inclined tone. DP is some love-lost nerd, though that isn't a problem or anything. I found Steph too completely "PO'ed" for my liking, though. She's much more dire in your story than in mine, and I think that she tends to emulate both characteristics. But generally she'll cheer up in the midst of her own fury, at least when friends come up. She didn't even greet DP or Aileen in this story, which I think tends to go against her character. My last complaint is that, especially at the beginning, you tended to get "out of person." This is different from being in character- it means that you switched from first to third person, or from past to present tense, etc. Professional writers have to learn to keep the same narrative perspective the whole time, unless they pull a stop and switch to differing characters perspectives in a tactful way.

But overall it's good for you. Mint's a cutie, too. ^-^ Can't wait to read the next chapter, especially with the intro of Ky and hopefully some more DP moves on Aileen.

[bladeofky]

hahahahaha, hey, it's not my fault the teacher's not good looking enough.

Wow DP, so much analysis. ^-^ ;; This is Alan's style, fast and sloppy and anime-ish. It's why he always manages to post and I can't find the motiation to.

[RayanStiger]

Yup, besides the fact that he isn't near HALF as lazy as you are, Ky. XP

And yes much anaylysis. As his primary editor for most of his writing, I tend to give as much input as possible. That, and I just do that for everybody whose writing I read and enjoy. It's the writer in me. And I do realize he's got a different style, and that's fine. Just that there are some rules in writing that are best left intact so that your story is better. But obviously you don't want to follow all of the rules or else everything would get trite and dull, now wouldn't it?

[RayanStiger]

Cherry & Pie! XD So great. Shira's avatar looks so incredibly awesome, minus the ears. And Hiero looks tight, too.

[Rene]

CHERRY IS SOOOOOOOOOOO CUTE! AND PIE TOO!

Every time I hear the name Cherry I think of how that's what my dad wanted to name me cus my face was so red when I was born X.x

Already told u my opinion on ur story. Its great ^>^!